Hi every one,
This is a plot I am planning for a 60-70 minute script. Is cliche but I want to make something that would sell.
Regards,
Jitesh
PLOT
Ankush Chavan is a young fellow around 23. He dreams of making it big in the hockey world. He is good at playing too. He gets selected for the district hockey team.
Ankush plays really well in the district hockey league. He is named as the next Dhanraj Pillai. He keeps playing well for the district teams. Now he is well known. Sure of selection in the state hockey team.
Priya is a TV journalist. Being a beginner in the journalist world she wants a great news to start her career. What could be better than an interview with Ankush.
Rohit Malhotra is a MBA. He wants to go into a career where he can manage public figures like sportspersons, actors etc. But he is a fresher, so no one is willing to get him on the job.
Priya's interview of Ankush is a hit. Priya becomes permanant in a media company. Ankush gets the exposure he needs. Rohit sees this interview and decides Ankush is the one he is going to manage.
Rohit convinces Ankush and becomes his manager. He also gets him a good enough sponser. Rohit is also doing well now. He gets offers to manage another very senior player towards the end, who is not getting enough sponsers because of his age. But Rohit refuses giving his full time to Rohit.
Meanwhile Priya and Ankush are attracted towards each other. Eveything is going on fine till...
Another celebrity manager Andreas D'Silva, sees the potential in Ankush. He convinces Ankush to dump Rohit. And bags he contract to manage Ankush. Priya does not like D'Silva and tries to convince Ankush about it. But Ankush has a tiff with Priya, who does not want to see him again.
Rohit takes up the management of the senior player. He is doing well. He gets Priya to do a cover on the senior. Priya and Rohit are now real close. And in the moment of loss both come together to form a seamless bond.
D'Silva's connection get Ankush into the state team. D'Silva makes Ankush a great celebrity. This starts to take a toll on Ankush. He drowns in the fame. And concentrates less and less on his game. He is loosing on the game.
Rohit's player is also selected in the national team for his experience.
Finally the state championship arrives. Ankush looks terribly out of touch in the first game. In the second game he misses a crucial penalty, which costs him the game.
Ankush is thrown out of the team. The reason given is fitness. But everyone knows the real reason.
Ankush's team loose the championship. Rohit's player declares his retirement.
The failure starts taking toll in Ankush even in the district level matches. Ankush starts playing miserably. The sponsers start to go to a new player on the horizon. D'Silva also gives up on Ankush.
Ankush is in despair. He is lost and alone, no one to support him. Priya and Rohit come to know of Ankush's state. Rohit decides to take up his case. They approach Ankush and get him motivated.
Ankush starts practising with his friends. He works really really hard this time. Priya supports him well. Ankush starts playing again at the Distric level. Rohit starts gettings sponser for Ankush. Ankush is playing like a man on a mission. State championship gives him another chance.
Finally the day of the championship arrives. Ankush plays really well. Gets his team into the finals. But on the way he has picked up an injury. He is made to sit in the reserves for the final.
The last 10 minutes of the final. Rohit's team is tied at 1-1 with the rivals. Ankush gets a chance to prove himself. He hits a goal in the last minutes and the team wins.
Ankush is back to his winning ways. Everything is a happy conclusion. But Ankush has lost Priya to Rohit.
you want an honest opinion..?
I think this shit might sell if it was written very very well. I just couldn't even imagine I would try to write something like this because I would get bored and probably fell asleep every 5 minutes. To be a hit (if that's you'r goal) it would probably need Brad Pitt, Jennifer Lopez, Marlon Brando, Charlie Chaplin and Michael Jackson in the cast... Sorry, I think it's shit.
...but then again I'm not an expert
forgot something... You live in the country that probably produces about 1000 films every day, so go for it.
alright mate, I think it is obviously very clich? ! its a bit too mighty ducks for my liking (but maybe thats just the hockey thing going on) overall its a very disney plot line!
I would finish this.. but I think you are better than it.. I have read your scripts on your site and there is no need for you to be writing cliche material so soon.. ur other stories have a freshness which is good! Jitesh i normally love your stories but this is a bit too predictable for my liking!
<font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">Why don't you try and write something that is interesting and original and try and get a script sold that way.Originally posted by Jitesh:
Is cliche but I want to make something that would sell.
If you start off trying to write a derivitive piece of shit you'll end up with a badly written, derivitive script that you won't be able to sell and that you'll wish you hadn't wasted your time on.
Im with Vlad, man. Dont sell yourself and your art short.
I have also read your other works and I'm totally with the other guys... Don't go "cheap and cliche", just do your own stuff. It's much more interesting than trying to copy some hollywood films that are bad in the first place. I think there's about 100 000 writers in Los Angeles (or more) who can do it better anyway. Be creative nd original...
Clich?? Where's the guns, explosions and the all important chase sequence? ;-)
I saw the word "Hockey" and immediately switched off.
It comes across as a fairly shallow TV drama.
I guess it could be shot in a visually interesting way, that's the only way I'd watch it.
Hey Guys,
Thanks a lot.I am not going forward with this one.
Thanks for not letting me step down the ladder.
Cheers,
Jitesh
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